Monday, September 17, 2012

GUTGAA Pitch Contest #25 - Angel Bait


TITLE OF MANUSCRIPT: Angel Bait
GENRE: Paranormal Romance
WORD COUNT: 85,000 words

QUERY:
Bul­lets, dag­gers, and holy pow­ers can plow through any threat with ease. Yet none of that crap can pro­tect Jar­rid, a Heaven-sent assas­sin, from the tempt­ing Ionie Gifford.

As a half-Angel hit man, Jar­rid learns a Rene­gade Angel is in Detroit. Such a high-level take­down is the answer to his prayers: an end to his forced employ­ment with Heaven. He only has to find the right bait to draw his elu­sive enemy out of hid­ing. The per­fect lure? Ionie, a news reporter the Rene­gade wants silenced.

Ionie agrees to help the enig­matic Nephilim with pen­e­trat­ing sil­ver eyes and a worship-worthy body, but only because he agrees to her terms. He’s her all-access pass into the city’s super­nat­ural under­world where she hopes to locate her mother’s killer.

But Jar­rid is blind­sided by her beauty and tenac­ity, and he finds the eternity-old glac­ier around his heart thaw­ing. With duty and desire at war within him, he’s forced to either save Ionie from the trap he designed and stay chained to Heaven – or make her col­lat­eral damage.

FIRST 150 WORDS:
Inky night con­cealed Jar­rid within famil­iar shad­ows like a sec­ond skin. His cur­rent cellphone-jabbering tar­get paced a few yards away in the Detroit alley, igno­rant of his impend­ing visit from one of Heaven’s assas­sins. Empty liquor bot­tles, bro­ken and jagged, crunched beneath the man’s feet. Loose garbage bags flapped in the breeze, blend­ing the putrid con­tents to a dozen other vile stinks.

Jarrid absently stroked the leather strap at his chest. The inlaid sigil of the Eter­nal Order, a deep-set carv­ing of ancient sym­bols, was bumpy under his thumb. Each intri­cate rune labeled him a ser­vant, a life­time branding.

He clenched his jaw to sti­fle a yawn. Assas­sin 101, Mas­ter Course: Stay focused, ass­hole. How the hell had he pulled this lame assign­ment? His fin­gers slipped from the strap to touch the first dag­ger, then its twin, nes­tled deep in the har­nesses along his sides. He expelled a quiet breath.

9 comments:

  1. Oooooooh, a sexy alpha male badass angel! I'm intrigued.

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  2. Angels - Yes. Assassins - Yes. Alpha Males and all those weapons, definitely yes.
    I'm hooked - those first 150 words leave me wanting to read more. I vote for Pitch #25 - Angel Bait.

    When will this story be available?

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  3. Angel assassins? Knives, schemes, and unexpected love in the mix? What could be better? I want more!

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  5. I love the repentant alpha getting thawed. And I love your voice. Angel Bait sounds awesome!

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  6. This is not usually my thing but your voice shines through in your query. I bet this is a fun one.

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  7. This sounds really interesting, and I LOVE that it's based in Detroit. What better city for an angel assassin? Great job!

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  8. I love this one!! Great writing, I think it deserves some votes!! Best of luck :)

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